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It was calm and the the water was blue and the sky was blue
and a
family of 3 penguins and they were happy. Because the baby
was
going to into the water for the very first time in his life so they
were
so happy for him.
and a
family of 3 penguins and they were happy. Because the baby
was
going to into the water for the very first time in his life so they
were
so happy for him.
The lazier melted the ice berg completion and the other
penguins
diapered.
penguins
diapered.
at the spy fox’s companion’s house she was going to give him a glass of wine. Then his watch glued a bright yellow and he had to go to and stop a evil man called doctor hammer head!.Then he went to sanders in a can when he gets there he has the choices between saving the world or saving his girlfriend. the fishes thank you for reading this work and I will post soon.
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